During the last century, The humen(ww. - humanity) has been trying to get into the(מיותר) space. Get into(ww. - exploring) space cost(gr. - costs) alot of money and the risk is huge.
It's pepol(sp. - people's) life(gr. - lives) we're talking about and not just useless experiment(s).
Some of the pepol(sp.) think that getting out of earth its(ww. - is) dangerous and useless.
That it's spending(phr. and ww. - a waste of...) of time and money. On the other hand, alot of pepol(sp.) think that it's importent(sp.) to explore atoher(ww. - other) worlds. It's an(ww. - a) hard issue that will be(מיותר) contiue to be discuess(gr. - discussed) many years in the future.
Its cost(gr. - It costs) alot of money to travel to the(מיותר) out(er) space,(Start a new sentence) in(ww. - On) the other hand, it really might help the(מיותר) humen(sp.) been(מיותר) kind in the future in many ways, fuel, water and many atoher stuff(מיותר). Its risking pepol(sp. - people's) life(gr. - lives) too, which is dangerous but its there(sp. - their) choice, they like to do that.
I think that we need to go out (to) space. Earth will not be here for ever and we need to find (a)replacement, in case somthing will happen, we cant just die, (Start a new sentence here) we may find an atoher(ww. - another) planet to leave(ww. - live) on it(מיותר). Its the right thing to do.
It's pepol(sp. - people's) life(gr. - lives) we're talking about and not just useless experiment(s).
Some of the pepol(sp.) think that getting out of earth its(ww. - is) dangerous and useless.
That it's spending(phr. and ww. - a waste of...) of time and money. On the other hand, alot of pepol(sp.) think that it's importent(sp.) to explore atoher(ww. - other) worlds. It's an(ww. - a) hard issue that will be(מיותר) contiue to be discuess(gr. - discussed) many years in the future.
Its cost(gr. - It costs) alot of money to travel to the(מיותר) out(er) space,(Start a new sentence) in(ww. - On) the other hand, it really might help the(מיותר) humen(sp.) been(מיותר) kind in the future in many ways, fuel, water and many atoher stuff(מיותר). Its risking pepol(sp. - people's) life(gr. - lives) too, which is dangerous but its there(sp. - their) choice, they like to do that.
I think that we need to go out (to) space. Earth will not be here for ever and we need to find (a)replacement, in case somthing will happen, we cant just die, (Start a new sentence here) we may find an atoher(ww. - another) planet to leave(ww. - live) on it(מיותר). Its the right thing to do.
Again, you are not saying much. You remain on the surface without explaining clearly what exactly you mean. You repeat the same 2 arguments and do not introduce new ones. Also, your organization needs some work. When you write an essay presenting opinions for and against an issue, you use the 2nd paragraph, for example, to present all the arguments for and the next one, to present all the arguments against. You don't onlt present arguments, you explain them, too. I would read the instructions in our forum more carefully, if I were you....
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