Homework.

26/2/09

Homework is very widely exepeted among teachers in the world.

Some pepol are opposed to homework in the claim that homework is enslaving and hurts them. Ben Berrfato claims that homework is not necessary, only classwork.

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In my opinion, homework is very important. Ben's describes the homework in such a bad way, children must practise to get to results beacuse its helping them to think more clearly and the work get int there heads.
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It's not only practise it amployment to. Ben is misjuding the homework, he is talking about slavery homework.

Its not slavery , if he doesn't want he doesn't have to make them, but it's his future

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Homework help to get good grades and sucess. Ben shows us the slaving issue but it is a mistake to call homework "slavery".It is made to help you only,

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Daphna

Fixed...

Out space

During the last century, The humen(ww. - humanity) has been trying to get into the(מיותר) space. Get into(ww. - exploring) space cost(gr. - costs) alot of money and the risk is huge.
It's pepol(sp. - people's) life(gr. - lives) we're talking about and not just useless experiment(s).

Some of the pepol(sp.) think that getting out of earth its(ww. - is) dangerous and useless.
That it's spending(phr. and ww. - a waste of...) of time and money. On the other hand, alot of pepol(sp.) think that it's importent(sp.) to explore atoher(ww. - other) worlds. It's an(ww. - a) hard issue that will be(מיותר) contiue to be discuess(gr. - discussed) many years in the future.

Its cost(gr. - It costs) alot of money to travel to the(מיותר) out(er) space,(Start a new sentence) in(ww. - On) the other hand, it really might help the(מיותר) humen(sp.) been(מיותר) kind in the future in many ways, fuel, water and many atoher stuff(מיותר). Its risking pepol(sp. - people's) life(gr. - lives) too, which is dangerous but its there(sp. - their) choice, they like to do that.

I think that we need to go out (to) space. Earth will not be here for ever and we need to find (a)replacement, in case somthing will happen, we cant just die, (Start a new sentence here) we may find an atoher(ww. - another) planet to leave(ww. - live) on it(מיותר). Its the right thing to do.

Again, you are not saying much. You remain on the surface without explaining clearly what exactly you mean. You repeat the same 2 arguments and do not introduce new ones. Also, your organization needs some work. When you write an essay presenting opinions for and against an issue, you use the 2nd paragraph, for example, to present all the arguments for and the next one, to present all the arguments against. You don't onlt present arguments, you explain them, too. I would read the instructions in our forum more carefully, if I were you....

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Daphna

Peer perssure

Today, a lot of teenagers suffer from peer pressure .This problem is very widespread .Teens around the world handle peer pressure and try to find a solution.

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There are a lot of arguments between teenagers on this issue. Students are facing a lot of peer pressure problems as drugs ,theft and a lot more subjects. In most of the cases, kids tend to be naive and surrender to peer pressure. The excitement attract(gr. - attracts) them and they just make(ww. - do) it.

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In my opinion, there is no reason to be affect(ed) by peer pressure. Teenagers have to make their own decision and find a way to cope with there problems.

I'm sorry, but this is not an essay, it's a paragraph at the most. Apart from the first and last paragraphs, there is not much there. You will have to make an effort to elaborate on your ideas.